Fine Cut | Development

Our edit before the fine cut had all of the elements we wanted in it, while also having the improved bits that Helen wanted us to change. We hadn't colour corrected it yet, and the sound wasn't at the right volume, but Helen didn't mind as those changes wouldn't effect our storyline and script. We also hadn't recorded the commentary with Carol, but to give Helen the right idea as to what it would sound like, Nisserin recorded herself saying it and placed it in the order and the slots that we would put the actual commentary in.

Feedback

Here is the feedback Helen gave us after watching our fine cut edit:

• Don't put a static image over a moving one.
• For our opening title, we need to put the text over a static landscape rather than one that is moving otherwise it looks like the titles are floating.
• Add bird noises in the background of the video to create atmosphere.
• We need to adjust our wording in the commentary slightly.
• We have decided that we will look through the commentary, change it and see Helen once more with our script to give us some feedback before we record it.
• Rearrange some of the actuality shots of John so they are featured throughout the video and not just at the end.
• Get rid of some of the clicks in the audio.
• Before the ending credits, start the music earlier and fade it in to keep the atmosphere the same.
• Move some of the archive footage around.
• Much tighter in the beginning sequence.
• Liked the cutaways we added and where they are.
• It's building very nicely.

Overall, we are very happy with Helen's feedback and we will change the commentary and make the changes we need to in order to make the documentary better.