Most of the changes that were suggested were for the voice over script, however there were a few minor adjustments specific for the shots.
Charles Dickens' Paperweight
- It was suggested, since the second quote is from 'Great Expectations' and the character who is talking is a younger guy, that instead of an old man voice over for that quote.
- I will find someone who is younger to do this voice over and then re add it to the video, which won't be too difficult.
- There was also talk of having the last quote either with the old man voice or the young man voice.
- I have said that I will make two different ones with a different ending, and when I show them for the fine cut viewing, they can decide which one they prefer.
- They also thought there should be a larger gap between the first and second quote, as currently after the first one is over, the second one appears straight afterwards.
- I agreed with them on this, and I will make sure there is some time before the second quote to create the scene of the Court Hall.
- Much like my feelings towards the end of this edit, we all agreed that the loud paper sfx of it rustling was too distracting, but the other one, which is paper being turned, can stay for the first quote.
- I was thinking, for the second quote, about adding a faint sfx of men talking in the background to create the court room sort of effect. I'll add this and see what they see in the fine cut viewing.
- Jeremy suggested a good idea which was, to start the image looking old with a sepia type filter to it, and then fade into the normal imagery of the paperweight to create the contrast between old and new.
- I quite liked this idea, and I will experiment with the different filters to make it look quite old and vintage.
- When watching the video back, I realised that the static noise on the visuals didn't look very great, and I wasn't happy with the outcome of this, so we all agreed that it didn't need to be there.
- I did suggest the idea of having a vignette effect throughout the video, and both Rachel and Jeremy liked that idea, so I am going to experiment with the different filters offered to me.
Prisoner of War, Ship Model
- Jeremy suggested having more of a mention as to the fact that the prisoners wouldn't have made the model as a memorial to the other prisoners, they would've done it to earn money .
- We discussed this and came up with a new way or wording some of the voice over parts that mention this, and I will add this to the script.
- Jeremy also said that the shots before seeing the actual model on display were quite quickly cut. We discussed either slowing the cut down, or only having two shots instead of three.
- This is something I will experiment with when editing for the fine cut.
Sir Cloudesley's Silver Plate
- There were a few adjustments on the wordings of some of the sentences within the narrative. It was suggested that instead of saying Sir Cloudesley was an MP in 1659, it should say from 1659 as he was MP for quite a few years.
- I've also decided to add a few more additions to the narrative dependent on what I discussed with Rachel and Jeremy.
- These will be added to the script.
- When the narrative mentions the plate sitting proudly at Guildhall, we have changed that to "sitting proudly in the Court Hall at Rochester Guildhall Museum" as it's more direct.
- I have also shot the storm scene now, so I will need to edit that in and also maybe find an archive picture of the ship itself.
- This is something I can experiment with.
The overall outcome of this viewing is really positive, and they both really enjoyed and liked what I had created. Rachel did mention that the Medway logo is out of date so she will send me the new one, and she also mentioned me putting my own name on the video, so I will add some credits and my own production logo to the end as well.
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